The return of the Poems/Songs (pt3)

[Trivium \m/]

Just in case you are wondering who this is, it's Sypher K just with a new name (^__^) and if this is in the wrong forum, sowwy. Its been some time since I have been here. Anyway, since I have met a certain female that I am deeply in love with (even though we are not a couple), I have found a new reason to start writing my poems and songs again but this time, they are better and more organized than all that other crap I did before. Now I can write heartfelt poems and throat destroying songs with much more emotion and more clearness. After 2 years have past, a new song has been created with some inspiration from Trivium's song "My Hatred". Well anyway, here is the song.I know its abit short and i know I am using a line from one of my past lyrics (Hate) but I thought it would fit perfectly. I want feedback and I hope you like it. If you dont, see you in hell \m/ As usual, if you ahve a question on what a verse/line means, just ask and I'll explain.

The End

So you wanna try
To make me cry,
To take my life,
And force me to die.
You will bleed,
Feed my need,
Destroy the seed,
And bow down to me.


(Chorus)
You may have began this game
That drove me mentally insane,
But I will stop your horror
And end your reign of terror.


I will no longer
Stand by your side,
Try to hide,
And continue to bide.
I will start a fight,
Take away your sight,
Take away your light,
And cast your eternal night.

(chorus)

Good fuking bye
This is the end.
Now fuking die
For you my friend.
Good fuking bye
This is the end.
Now fuking die...

[MasterOfGravity]

Hey welcome back Sypher K, good to see you again.


Hmm..I would really like to hear the melody to this song. I liked the lyrics. A little depressing, but well written.
Whats the chords?

[((KvN))]

Lyrics are cool, but llike Nastercoff said, remedy added would be could, have you thought of one yet?

[Trivium \m/]

Thank you. It's good to be back. I only write lyrics for songs, im not in a band but I gonna submit this and a couple of other songs to the band Trivium and see if they like to us it as a secret track or whatever.Even though the song "My Hatred" is not on their webpage, I could send you the song thru aim or whatever. I loved how everything was working perfectly with the short verses, heavy sound,perfect timing,kick ass solo by the lead singer/guitar who just turned 18 last month and I was basically taking out the original lyrics and puting in mine.

[MasterOfGravity]

I would love to hear a song. I f you have msn my mail adress is [email protected] so....

[((KvN))]

Do you know the band Tivium?

[Trivium \m/]

Nastercoff- I only have AIM but i will try to think of a way to send you the song

((X ZreX))- I don't know the band personally but I talk to them online every now and then. They are so awesome and they even game me an update on their next cd even though they released their debut cd (Ember To Inferno) about 4 months ago. They already have 9 new songs set for the cd and they told me several of the song names and what I should be expecting on the cd. If you want, I could give out their newest guitar member Corey screen name.

[((KvN))]

OMG, it's awesome to know a band up close, not, that, I haven't, but, one that you don't know. And, erm, it's ok dude, I don't really know too much about them, and if I tried to chat, it will make me a no0b.

(Reinactment)
XZreX: Hey man!!!
Corey: Uhh, and _|o0 4|23...? (you are)
XZreX:.................. I'm , uhh, a fan...
Corey: Really? watz my album of all times.
XZreX: I, don't......
XZreX Signed Off.

[Trivium \m/]

lol. you dont need to worry.Corey is not like that. He is 19 and very down to earth and he doesnt use l33t termanology. He would ask you how long you have been a fan of Trivium and if you said 1 minute, he would be cool with it. So if you want, I got the sn and if you also want, I saved my first chat with them so I could show you just how cool they are.

[Trivium \m/]

Come on people. I would really appreciate it if I recieved some feedback on the lyrics and dont say thats it's good when you think it's sh!t. Say what you want to say and type what you want to type.

[Sanitarium]

Umm.. Definitly some good parts, like the chorus. Overally: not bad

[nosebluntsmoker]

Satan would be proud.

[Trivium \m/]

Thx guys. I wrote another song during my lunch period and personally, i dont think that it's that good but liek i always tell my friends, you can never judge what you created. So here it is:

Why Me?

Why can't I find a person
That I can trust and depend on
With all the secrets that I have
And all the thoughts I think?
Maybe it is because every person
That I believed in or looked up to
Crucified my beliefs and toyed
With all the emotions that I have felt.
Or maybe it is because the people
That I trusted talked shit behind my back
And thought they should make fun of me
Even though I was always there for them.

(Chorus)
I am going insane and
I am losing my mind.
Can somebody please tell me
"You are going to be fine"
Or should I just rollover
And wait to die?

Why can't I find a person
That i can fall in love
With every drop of romance
That is running through my veins?
Maybe it is because
The one who created my destiny
Wanted me to feel special and
Better than the rest of the world.
If being special means that
No one is worthy of knowing me,
Then my destiny is a golden staircase
That is leading me to the gates of misery.

(Chorus)

Why can't I find a person
That I can be myself with
And is not afraid of what
They are going to see from me?
Maybe it is because
What they see on the outside
Is what I am
On the inside.
Or maybe I can only be friends
With the people that use me
As if I am a tool created
For their mental joyness.

(Chorus)

Until I can find someone
That can set me free,
It looks like I am forever forgotten
And that is what I will always be...

[Trivium \m/]

Im working on this song right now to make it longer,better and its about drug addiction and trying to get over it so I want it to have some sort of an impact and portray alot of the mixed feelings and the punishment ou get from doing drugs.(No, I have never been addicted to drugs..................Okay I was addicted to pills but it was those damn Flinstone Vitamin pills. Those things are so damn good except for Dino, he was grape and I hate grape. ptwey) I just wrote the last stanza right before I typed submitted this in so sorry if it throws the song off track and it doesn't make any sense. Also I changed some of the lyrics that were on my first draft and left some lyrics out from the first draft. So here is the new song.Enjoy:

Payback

How dare you return
Into my purified life
And ask for my forgiveness
When you bullied me around.
I want to tie you up and
Put you in chained suspension.
Then I am going to torture you
To feel my damn-nation.

(Chorus)
I will get my revenge
For everything you've done to me.
Then I can do anything I want
And be what I want to be.

You used to humiliate me
And you forced me to beg.
Everybody that I loved left me
And I wanted to be dead.
You loved to fight me
And you always won.
When I asked my father for help
He said "I have no son."

(Chorus)

You used to keep me company
When I was all alone.
Even though I felt you next to me
I still felt all alone.
You used to make me smile
And make me feel better.
But I now relize with you in my life,
You turned everything sweet to bitter.

(Chorus)

[Sanitarium]

Wow man, you got lots of lyrics in your head.. How do you come up with all that stuff?